Oh honey. I'm not saying you shouldn't have written it, or that you shouldn't write at all--certainly not!; free speech and press are part of what make this world great (or at least livable), and writing a lot of fanfic is the number one best way to get your writing skills up to par. I'm just saying that I personally didn't really like the story and feel a bit put off by the content. (I have elitist standards.)
I'm glad you enjoy Naruto and other anime and writing for the fandoms, and that you have such clear physical evidence of your accomplishments. I'm glad you and the hundreds who read your fic enjoy it so, and I'm glad that you're getting a good background on writing to a deadline now so that you can use those lessons to help you succeed in the future. Congratulations on reaching more than two hundred thousand words--that's like five novels all together!
It's the specific problems I have with certain themes in your work that bother me enough to ramble about it in what hardly counts as a review (if it was a review, I'd be giving, like, constructive advice). Themes such as noncon (because no means no), overly emphasized childishness in sexual fantasies (far too close to pedophilia for my tastes), and inaccurate characterization (canon!Naruto is...uh...well, I believe that he's not very feminine, or blatantly gay. You want blatantly gay, hit up Orochimaru or Sai, though the latter needs a bit of faux-autism to be played right) because they sort of offend my sensibilities as a reader and a fan of the pairing. That's not your problem, of course; one of the facts of life is that not everyone is going to like your work--like those who deride Stephanie Meyer, Linnea Sinclair, and other authors with tight fan bases.
Since I seem to have really offended you, I'll make sure to go back and read the whole thing with more of an open mind, but I can't make any promises. If it's not meant to be for me to be a fan of your work, then it's just not meant to be. Good luck with your future writing, and try not to take criticism too hard, no matter how bizarre it is.
(Not so long ago I would have thought your fic was the most fantastic thing I'd ever read. Funny how things change, huh? I almost wish I could have read all of these back then, so I could have enjoyed them without excessive sarcasm.)
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Re: Mean!
on 2008-Sep-05, Friday 03:12 (UTC)I'm glad you enjoy Naruto and other anime and writing for the fandoms, and that you have such clear physical evidence of your accomplishments. I'm glad you and the hundreds who read your fic enjoy it so, and I'm glad that you're getting a good background on writing to a deadline now so that you can use those lessons to help you succeed in the future. Congratulations on reaching more than two hundred thousand words--that's like five novels all together!
It's the specific problems I have with certain themes in your work that bother me enough to ramble about it in what hardly counts as a review (if it was a review, I'd be giving, like, constructive advice). Themes such as noncon (because no means no), overly emphasized childishness in sexual fantasies (far too close to pedophilia for my tastes), and inaccurate characterization (canon!Naruto is...uh...well, I believe that he's not very feminine, or blatantly gay. You want blatantly gay, hit up Orochimaru or Sai, though the latter needs a bit of faux-autism to be played right) because they sort of offend my sensibilities as a reader and a fan of the pairing. That's not your problem, of course; one of the facts of life is that not everyone is going to like your work--like those who deride Stephanie Meyer, Linnea Sinclair, and other authors with tight fan bases.
Since I seem to have really offended you, I'll make sure to go back and read the whole thing with more of an open mind, but I can't make any promises. If it's not meant to be for me to be a fan of your work, then it's just not meant to be. Good luck with your future writing, and try not to take criticism too hard, no matter how bizarre it is.
(Not so long ago I would have thought your fic was the most fantastic thing I'd ever read. Funny how things change, huh? I almost wish I could have read all of these back then, so I could have enjoyed them without excessive sarcasm.)